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Violent Silence by ~FullOfLies24:iconFullOfLies24:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Fixed


I let you use me numerous times

              I let you take me over from inside

Sitting in this crowded room you see anyone but me

        It makes me realize I was only dreaming a reality

                  The kisses were empty and meaningless

Your touch was no more than momentary bliss

           The screaming dreams of you become a violent silence

  Just looking at you I know why I fell prey to this

                  I learned the hard way that you cant fall in love with a dream

        Now just the thought of you makes me want to scream

                                        But when I see you I wont show a sign

       That I dont care that you're not mine

                 Even if you are killing me silently

             I'll never ahow the hurt, torment, and pain you caused me

                                                       I'll pass by you with confidence

    And you'll never know I cared about your ignorance

                       Razors now replace the intensity of your kiss

       The taste of blood in place of your lips

                  The screaming dreams of you become a violent silence

  Just looking at you I know why I fell prey to this
©2006-2010 ~FullOfLies24
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Author's Comments

I kinda need some help with this...it got a little bit weak.

yes...i was in a rather angry mood

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~salad7 Jan 25, 2006, 8:25:18 AM
actually it is quite good though i can see why you say it fell weak. it gets stronger again twoards the last lines, i really like, "the taste of blood in place of your lips" i'm not sure what to tell you though... i like it

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~gutterclown Jan 25, 2006, 2:11:53 PM
O_O
ooooo

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*~ GuTTER ClowN~*
(MASKING TAPE FOREVER!!!!)
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~FullOfLies24 Jan 25, 2006, 4:00:03 PM
Thankee for 'ye kindness...lol...

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"Loves the funeral of hearts"
-H.I.M, Funeral of Hearts
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~FullOfLies24 Jan 25, 2006, 4:00:52 PM
is that good or bad???? lol

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"Loves the funeral of hearts"
-H.I.M, Funeral of Hearts
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~gutterclown Jan 25, 2006, 6:16:31 PM
lol
it's awe
so yes, good

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*~ GuTTER ClowN~*
(MASKING TAPE FOREVER!!!!)
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~FullOfLies24 Jan 26, 2006, 10:23:40 AM
YAY! Thankee! *smiles* that fills me with much happy!

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"Loves the funeral of hearts"
-H.I.M, Funeral of Hearts
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~preysonwolvesforfun9 Jan 31, 2006, 10:08:59 PM
I really like it. The beginning and end are really strong though the middle is a bit weak though dont get me wrong it is good. I like:
I'll pass by you with confidence

And you'll never know I cared about your ignorance
Its really awesome.

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We are here to stay
Better be nice
Because we have hell of a bite!
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~kikimers13 Feb 1, 2006, 8:32:05 AM
I love it. I think it rocks monkeys socks. It's not weak at all. It's really good. :eyes:

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Kirsten
:eager:"Marsh-mall-ow":chew:
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~FullOfLies24 Feb 1, 2006, 9:32:19 AM
thankee kindly

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"So kiss me like you did. My heart stopped beating. Such a softer sin. I'm melting in your eyes. I lost my place." -I caught fire (in your eyes), The Used
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